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First off, thank you for applying! While your prompts are acceptable, the mods have come up with a few issues regarding the background and personality of Neji.
1) Please check with the established Hinata players background, as she touches on the history of the Hyuuga family, and we would like to see you incorporate this. Also, how is he keeping this from his family? Are they checking up on him? Does he feel bad or wrong about keeping it a secret? Just a bit more clarification on his family is what we're asking for.
2) Please elaborate further on why Neji chose this occupation. While creativity in character's background is encouraged, for Neji to take a step like this, we would require more of an in-depth look into why he had chosen it. Was there anything more that drove him besides the call for attention and if it was that, why would he chose that occupation to receive it? This also helps to give us a better look into his personality at the same time.
3) The personality portion could use a bit more detailing as well, as what is there is a good starting point, but doesn't fully explain where he's coming from. You mentioned he was a prodigy and a genius, so how does that play into his personality? What sorts of hobbies does he have? How does he spend his off time? Quirky things that make him who he is. Further detail on any of those would be encouraged.
Taking these into consideration, you have until June 24th to resubmit the background and personality of Neji, with any changes you have made. If you have any questions or concerns, don't hesitate to contact any of the mods at feel good mods on AIM.
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