Haku, in our opinion, is a very simplistic person. And what we got from your application was anything but. It started out that way, but towards the end, it seemed as if you took a few steps too many away from who and what Haku really is. It's established canon that most if not all of Haku's personality is based on his relationship with Zabuza. And despite the lack of one in our little community, the idea of it still remains the same in our collective minds. His character generates from his dependency on another. Their goals. Their personality. Etc. And we simply did not get that from your application.
Also, little quibble. From our prospective, it appears as if you mapped out Haku's characterization based on your choice of PB. Instead, we feel it should be the other way around, that you should choose a PB that would fit in well with Haku's personality.
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